Well...
First of all, its short. Secondly, what is it supposed to be? Its the same song as in the game, but different instruments? Sure, its fine song and all, cant argue with that, but you might want to re-arrange it, or even re-compose, because remix is always better than just cycling the same song.
And that piano... is it midi? Cause it sounds pretty broken. And the choir (?) at 00:32 is too loud compared to the melody.
Yeah, sorry, I might just be upset that you got so nice score with only song that short. =( You really know what you are doing, its just some more practice, and take risks. Sometimes, at least.